吾辈是高二-w-表示吾辈语法部分最弱，考试基本靠感觉填涂- -听力有时好有时差，阅读也是一样的，考试及格了也就60几至今感觉勉勉强强，但是撑不长久很担忧。但是吾辈想挑战80分（100分制）看看-w-想要一个确实有效的学习方法-w-
其实以上说的都不是重点，重点是……您能帮我看看这句话哪里有错吗，谢谢=w=（咦？？？！！！
I imprecated fate that day, and tried to let time reflux in vain, however all things were irreparable. When the warm light which chopped by fate occasionally across the sky, seeing hope in fantasy. Time gear began to rotate again from New York event, until I die.
（那天我诅咒命运，妄图让时间回流，然而一切都无可挽回。当被命运切碎的暖光偶然划过天际，在错落的幻想中看到了希望。时间的齿轮从纽约开始再次转动，一直通向死亡。）
其实以上说的都不是重点，重点是……您能帮我看看这句话哪里有错吗，谢谢=w=（咦？？？！！！
I imprecated fate that day, and tried to let time reflux in vain, however all things were irreparable. When the warm light which chopped by fate occasionally across the sky, seeing hope in fantasy. Time gear began to rotate again from New York event, until I die.
（那天我诅咒命运，妄图让时间回流，然而一切都无可挽回。当被命运切碎的暖光偶然划过天际，在错落的幻想中看到了希望。时间的齿轮从纽约开始再次转动，一直通向死亡。）
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