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你能再帮我看一篇是不是烂文吗?
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1楼2011-10-27 14:29回复
    就是这篇,另外写的,如果你觉得真的很烂的话,那你改一下吧~~谢谢~~
    Topic: which do you prefer? voice message or writing message?
    When meeting upsetting or controversial problems, different people have different ways to discuss them with others. Personally, I choose to use email and text messaging every time for the following reasons.
    Firstly, email or text messaging can make people pour out their true feelings easily and directly. Thinking of someone else being on the other end of the phone when they are about to talk about some upsetting or controversial proble***ots of people may be embarrassed or under emotional stress, and the final result is that they say things that they don't really mean. For example, my desk mate is a lovely and energetic girl and we get on well with each other. However, sometimes her over-enthusiastic nature makes me feel uncomfortable. Once I called her and was supposed to point out this problem. But as soon as I heard her friendly voice, I changed my mind, because I found it too hard to speak out the words in my heart. Finally, I wrote an email to tell her everything I thought, and solved this problem successfully. After that experience, I realized that written forms of communication are more efficient for people to express themselves.
    Secondly, email or text messaging can prevent conflict and misunderstanding. People are most likely to have a fierce argument with some rude or reasonless behavior when they are discussing controversial problems. Differing from through the telephone directly, exchanging opinions and ideas by writing a message or an email can solve the problems in a more peaceful way, because people have more time to calm down first and carefully consider others' proposals. A few days ago, my uncle's neighbor wanted to occupy their shared platform, and he wrote an email to my uncle. At the beginning, my uncle thought it was a ridiculous idea and felt angry. But after read his reasons, my uncle acknowledged that his neighbor's needs are more important than his, so he willingly consented to the request.
    Besides, writing e-mail or text messaging is more convenient and may save more time. We can write it at any time and at any place, but while making a phone call we have to guarantee both sides have time. In addition, people won't be bothered by others' reactions when writing an e-mail or text messaging. One topic may easily be interrupted or changed by anyone on the other end of the phone. For example, after hearing your upsetting problems, your friends show some sympathy for your situation, and then begin to recall their problems. At last, you totally become a great listener and don't solve your own problem. To be honest, I have wasted too much time in similar situations.
    In conclusion, through written forms of communication such as email or text messaging, people can not only express their feelings directly and conveniently, but also avoid conflict and misunderstanding effectively. So I prefer to use e-mail or text messaging when I discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others.


    2楼2011-10-27 15:20
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      2025-11-04 05:29:08
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      本来就是作文啊。。


      5楼2011-10-27 15:31
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        我才呢!!!没看见#1讲是不是烂文吗。。是要人改作文额。。不是欣赏啊!!!


        7楼2011-10-27 15:34
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          我能看你写的作文嘛?之前看你写的关于蚊子的好好笑的~~~


          16楼2011-10-27 18:12
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            voice message 讲话的方式来交流(比如:电话)
            writing message 写字的方式来交流(比如:写信,e-mail...)


            20楼2011-10-27 19:10
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              知道乐~~


              21楼2011-10-27 19:10
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                你怎么不夸我呢。。。


                35楼2011-10-27 21:01
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                  2025-11-04 05:23:08
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                  谢谢~~~你改的真好~~~我明天睡醒了好好看~~~

                  


                  36楼2011-10-27 21:03
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                      44楼2011-10-28 19:11
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                        啊?


                        45楼2011-10-28 19:12
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                          不!!你很厉害的!!


                          46楼2011-10-28 19:12
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                            just because you haven't find out any grammar faults


                            47楼2011-10-28 20:02
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                              我帮你改了下第一段,后面的改不动了。。精神力不大好。。要睡觉了。。希望对你有帮助哦~~~~~~~~~~~~
                              Medical ethics is an important part of the spiritual civilization which places an indispensable role in our society. However, there is no doubt that almost everyone has greedy character in their personality. Of course, docter which be called white angel won’t be an exception as well. Recently, some doctors care more about how much they can earn rather than whether they can cure patients’ disease. From my perspective, people cannot be too greedy to neglect the very affairs which they should put on the top of the agenda, especially when those who are saving other people’s life.
                              PS:IELTS只要270字就够的嘛?不过题目好像是要比托福更论证更抽象额。。


                              48楼2011-10-28 23:23
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