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你能再帮我看一篇是不是烂文吗?
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1楼2011-10-27 14:29回复
    就是这篇,另外写的,如果你觉得真的很烂的话,那你改一下吧~~谢谢~~
    Topic: which do you prefer? voice message or writing message?
    When meeting upsetting or controversial problems, different people have different ways to discuss them with others. Personally, I choose to use email and text messaging every time for the following reasons.
    Firstly, email or text messaging can make people pour out their true feelings easily and directly. Thinking of someone else being on the other end of the phone when they are about to talk about some upsetting or controversial proble***ots of people may be embarrassed or under emotional stress, and the final result is that they say things that they don't really mean. For example, my desk mate is a lovely and energetic girl and we get on well with each other. However, sometimes her over-enthusiastic nature makes me feel uncomfortable. Once I called her and was supposed to point out this problem. But as soon as I heard her friendly voice, I changed my mind, because I found it too hard to speak out the words in my heart. Finally, I wrote an email to tell her everything I thought, and solved this problem successfully. After that experience, I realized that written forms of communication are more efficient for people to express themselves.
    Secondly, email or text messaging can prevent conflict and misunderstanding. People are most likely to have a fierce argument with some rude or reasonless behavior when they are discussing controversial problems. Differing from through the telephone directly, exchanging opinions and ideas by writing a message or an email can solve the problems in a more peaceful way, because people have more time to calm down first and carefully consider others' proposals. A few days ago, my uncle's neighbor wanted to occupy their shared platform, and he wrote an email to my uncle. At the beginning, my uncle thought it was a ridiculous idea and felt angry. But after read his reasons, my uncle acknowledged that his neighbor's needs are more important than his, so he willingly consented to the request.
    Besides, writing e-mail or text messaging is more convenient and may save more time. We can write it at any time and at any place, but while making a phone call we have to guarantee both sides have time. In addition, people won't be bothered by others' reactions when writing an e-mail or text messaging. One topic may easily be interrupted or changed by anyone on the other end of the phone. For example, after hearing your upsetting problems, your friends show some sympathy for your situation, and then begin to recall their problems. At last, you totally become a great listener and don't solve your own problem. To be honest, I have wasted too much time in similar situations.
    In conclusion, through written forms of communication such as email or text messaging, people can not only express their feelings directly and conveniently, but also avoid conflict and misunderstanding effectively. So I prefer to use e-mail or text messaging when I discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others.


    2楼2011-10-27 15:20
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      2025-11-03 08:50:45
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      怎么和我们上课要练的即兴oral那么像……8过楼主写的还挺好
      


      IP属地:美国3楼2011-10-27 15:22
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        像作文。生僻字太少。


        4楼2011-10-27 15:30
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          本来就是作文啊。。


          5楼2011-10-27 15:31
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            我还以为是写的精美散文让大家欣赏欣赏


            6楼2011-10-27 15:32
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              我才呢!!!没看见#1讲是不是烂文吗。。是要人改作文额。。不是欣赏啊!!!


              7楼2011-10-27 15:34
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                besides是不能这样用的 besides只能是一句话中的补充 不能用于一大段


                8楼2011-10-27 15:47
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                  可以用 Another indispensable part of my argument is that...


                  9楼2011-10-27 15:49
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                    LZ不是用于一大段,而是用在第四段的第一句话
                    Besides放在开头,加逗号。-----------Besides,...


                    10楼2011-10-27 15:50
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                      upsetting or controversial 出现很多次啊 换换别的 disputable debatable annoying frustrating


                      11楼2011-10-27 15:53
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                        就是不能用于第一句话


                        12楼2011-10-27 15:54
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                          BTW, 这是什么作文


                          13楼2011-10-27 15:55
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                            WHY?


                            14楼2011-10-27 15:59
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                              besides 只能引导分论点或插在句子中间 用语习惯没啥为什么


                              15楼2011-10-27 16:02
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