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吐槽个战锤的超长句+术语堆叠+故意简化了结构的词句

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这段是真恶心原文是下面这段
“Open the way.” Stele shouted, and with a thrust of his arm, the lacerated fingers sank into the flesh at Ulan’s collar. The pallid skin rippled like water and Stele merged his barbed digits into her bone and cartilage. The woman resisted, for what would be the first and last time in her life. It made little difference, as the inquisitor brought his undamaged fingers to her cheeks, the tips scraping away the false scars that hid the blemishes of psy-tuned metal contacts. Ulan could not scream; she could not breathe; she could only hold on and try not to die as Stele used her as a lens for his own psyker talent, magnifying his black will to cut a way into the writhing core of the Eye of Terror.
Inside the no-space of the immaterium, the creature Malfallax had been waiting, floating and circling the man-filth Stele in the manner of a sea predator scenting prey in distress. Unseen by the denizens of the material world, the realm of the warp was constantly surrounding them, a layer of unreality laid across the sordid, crude matter of their wastrel worlds. The forms the live-things called Chaos, in their limited little ways of perceiving the omni-verse, swarmed and thrived in this infinite ocean of mind and emotion. The daemon moved with Stele. Waiting, waiting and watching for the moment when the thrashing and chattering of the quarry was at its peak. Only then would it strike, lapping up the absolute perfection of its fear, sinking in rending teeth, tearing it to soul-shreds.
Now the prey called to him, through the conduit of the mutant abortion created by the corpse-god’s science. His instrument Stele cried out for the poisoned hand of Malfallax. The warp daemon teased itself with the anticipation of the shift; it was so infrequent that the beast could find itself a vessel strong enough to contain its essence for more than a few hours. Most flesh-things in the other reality were gossamer constructs of wet, weak meats. They would burn or inflate or explode if the Malfallax issued even an iota of itself into them—but it had worked hard to prepare for this day. Malfallax, Monarch of Spite, Heirophant of Vicissitude, was weary of partial manifestations, of animating the inert or the mindless to hold a ghost of his full and awful potential. It wanted to step freely into the plane of men and run it red with their bloody terror. Malfallax missed the feel of it over there beyond the veil; it was time to return.
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Unseen by the denizens of the material world, the realm of the warp was constantly surrounding them, a layer of unreality laid across the sordid, crude matter of their wastrel worlds. The forms the live-things called Chaos, in their limited little ways of perceiving the omni-verse, swarmed and thrived in this infinite ocean of mind and emotion.


IP属地:河北1楼2025-05-21 03:11回复
    这段我是这样翻译
    “开路。” 斯缇尔吼道,随着他手臂的猛推,那些被撕裂的手指陷入乌兰领口的血肉中。苍白的皮肤像水一样波动,斯缇尔将他带刺的手指融入她的骨头与软骨。这个女人抵抗了,这是她生命中第一次也是最后一次。这几乎没有区别,因为审判官将他未受损的手指按上她的脸颊,指尖刮去那些掩盖灵能调谐金属接触点的假疤痕。乌兰无法尖叫;她无法呼吸;她只能坚持着努力不死去,当斯缇尔将她作为自己灵能天赋的透镜,放大他的黑色意志以切开一条进入恐惧之眼扭动核心的道路。
    在非物质界的非空间中,生物马尔法拉克一直在等待,以海洋掠食者嗅到受困猎物的方式漂浮并环绕着人类渣滓斯缇尔。物质世界居民无法看见的,是亚空间领域不断包围着他们,一层非现实覆盖在他们荒芜世界的肮脏粗糙物质上。那些生命体以他们有限的渺小方式感知全能宇宙时称为混沌的形态,在这片心灵与情绪的无限海洋中蜂拥繁衍。恶魔与斯缇尔一同移动。等待着,等待着,观察着猎物挣扎与喋喋不休达到顶峰的瞬间。只有那时它才会出击,舔舐其恐惧的绝对完美,嵌入撕裂的牙齿,将其撕成灵魂碎片。
    现在猎物通过尸皇科学创造的突变畸体导管呼唤它。它的工具斯缇尔哭喊着要马尔法拉克的毒手。亚空间恶魔用对转变的预期挑逗自己;这野兽极少能找到足够强大的容器来容纳它的本质超过几小时。另一现实中的大多数血肉生物都是湿软弱肉的薄纱构造。如果马尔法拉克哪怕注入它自身的一丝,它们就会燃烧、膨胀或爆炸——但它为这一天努力准备了很久。马尔法拉克,怨恨君主,变迁圣奴,厌倦了部分显化,厌倦了驱动惰性或无智之物来承载它全部可怕潜能的幽灵。它想要自由踏入人类的平面,用他们血腥的恐惧将其染红。马尔法拉克怀念帷幕那侧的感触;是时候回归了。


    IP属地:河北来自Android客户端2楼2025-05-21 03:18
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      2025-08-03 10:52:49
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      重点说一说我最后提的那段
      物质世界居民无法看见的,是亚空间领域不断包围着他们,一层非现实覆盖在他们荒芜世界的肮脏粗糙物质上。那些生命体以他们有限的渺小方式感知全能宇宙时称为混沌的形态,在这片心灵与情绪的无限海洋中蜂拥繁衍。
      这段尼玛用了超长句+术语堆叠+故意简化了结构,是真恶心,这段我总觉得我翻译的不对感觉特别别扭


      IP属地:河北来自Android客户端3楼2025-05-21 03:20
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        哦对了,单独说明下
        在1版圣血天使综合里这个全能宇宙是用的omni-verse,而在出处的deus sanguinius中是omniverse


        IP属地:河北来自Android客户端4楼2025-07-09 16:05
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