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387楼2010-09-05 22:01

菜花子，此章甚有爱。

388楼2010-09-05 22:04

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389楼2010-09-05 22:16

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Well,I found some mistake in your essay.
As an example:
No widows =no woman that have lost her husband by death and has not remarried?
You're a naughty it = or maybe you should change it to "you're a naughty boy"?
How do I punish you? = maybe "how can I punish you?"is more appropriate?
Um……You have to write a review of 4000 words~If those who do not handed to me ... ... at your peril~ = maybe change "handed"to hand is more suitable because it is not yet happen.
You must write neatly and not allow someone to write.= maybe you should
add some description after the word "write" so that the sentence will look much prettier.
well, it is just my nonprofessional opinion.
a very very sorry from me if it put you in blue.

391楼2010-09-06 09:18