回复：55楼
你加我吧84938749

回复：58楼
这里，加上了...

嗯嗯

帮我想一下题目啊！

15楼的MM挺热心的。
首先说，我不认为自己语言能力厉害。
另外想给15楼MM建议的是，写作文尽量避免中式英语，注意些语法错误。
希望能越写越好，托福100+，呵呵

回复：64楼
什么题目

回复：65楼
你能加我吗843938749

我的小说啊去看看

回复：65楼
thanks,谢谢你的提醒

只能说，有点文不对题，老师估计看懂了也不理解也给不了太好的分，按中国老师的思维，慕容同学的文真的不太合适----
另外的确有中式英文的痕迹，有的地方有语法错误
Twilight
         The Recent film in European and American market , called "twilight". The 17-year-old girl Bella in the film once again in the kind of coincidence to know vampire Edward. Since then, two people have quietly buried under the heart, the emotional seed(这句话啥意思？不明白，中文？）.
         On such a film, the box office （啥意思）in Europe and the United States had been on, before, according to statistics, has more than 100 million. Why it is so popular, let's look at it.
               First: vampires for a long time have not released the subject matter这句话是中式的，中文啥意思？
               Second: vampire love experience is eye appealing, but also, and human love. 这句话是中式的，中文啥意思？
               Third: between those bizarre stories. 这不是一句完整的话
         If you take the vampire, it not only represents, bloodthirsty, also includes, permanent sturdy truck and ...... pretty Lianpang 这句想表达什么？中文？
                The "Twilight" let us know, like humans, can have different love, as any miracle can happen. Desperate film Bella and Edward together. She knows that Edward is really love her, but she also knew he as a part that would also like to have her blood. But she is still excited regardless of health, Edward fight back, and he do not want to hurt Bella. However, and vampires together, inevitably some difficulties, the difficulties that will be two separate, but it is not, will only make them more concerned about each other, even more in love with each other. Difficulties only their tightly "tied" together and never part. 这两句话想表达什么？
          Let us pray that they will always be together, never separated
完了，这段让我一看简直惨不忍睹----希望楼主看到了回复一下

我才学了12天....

类似的作文，我们还在上高一时写过
其实百度一下，你就知道了