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我参加了一个全国的英语比赛,今天中午刚刚笔试完。口试的英语作文发在这里,小瑞瑞帮我检查一下,有没有什么不通顺,语法不对的地方帮我改一下~~谢谢!


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    Hello!I'm ZhangJiaRui.My English name is Sue. T'm eleven years old.I'm in Class 2 ,Grade 6. I have many good friends. They are friendly to me. I like singing ,seeing movies, reading books and surfing the Internet. I surf the Internet three times a week. I read books everyday. And I sports everyday. I think I'm not very healthy.But I have a good habit. I sleep 10 hours everyday. My favorite movie is Titanic. My favorite singer is Jolin. She's beautiful. I like eating dumplings, mooncakes, strawberries...... I'm surfing the Internet, playing sports, visiting my friends and my family in summer holiday. I go to school by bus everyday. It takes me abuot 20 minutes. I am a good student. I do my homework everyday. It takes me abuot 90 minutes. I can speak Chinese and English. I like English best. And I learn English everyday. I like atumn best. It's cool! In atumn, we can go to a park, fly a kite, have a barbecue...... My favorite fastivel is Chinese New Year. Because people give money in red packets to us.
    This is me. I hope you can make friends with me!   


    2楼2010-04-18 13:38
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      2025-11-23 05:26:06
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      额...我忽然发现俺们这地方的英语课本好低级【至少有很多的单词我不认识以及很多句子俺们初一才学】


      IP属地:河南3楼2010-04-18 13:44
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        不是你们那边教材低级,是我学的快。我学到初二了(*^__^*) 嘻嘻,所以你才会有不认识的~~


        4楼2010-04-18 13:48
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          我晚了吗?


          IP属地:山东5楼2010-04-18 14:31
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            seeing movies.............


            IP属地:日本6楼2010-04-18 15:06
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              .....我觉得.......瑞瑞好强。。。。。。
              还有。。。。。。jolin是谁??
              还有最后一句改成I hope i can be a good friend of yours.可能通点


              IP属地:江苏7楼2010-04-18 17:04
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                小曳曳+1


                IP属地:山东8楼2010-04-18 17:37
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                  .....


                  IP属地:江苏9楼2010-04-18 17:41
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                    同小瑞瑞..语法错误虽然小但是很多


                    IP属地:广东10楼2010-04-18 18:29
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                      楼主多大


                      IP属地:内蒙古11楼2010-04-18 19:38
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                        蔡依林~jolin


                        12楼2010-04-18 21:57
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                          额,这篇作文周兄改后还可以,就是,内容,是不是幼稚一点了?


                          13楼2010-04-18 21:58
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                            小学生作文这样已经很不错了


                            IP属地:山东14楼2010-04-19 12:54
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                              祝楼主成功哈~


                              15楼2010-04-19 13:44
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