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写了一首旋律说唱,请问哪里可以提升

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IP属地:泰国1楼2019-10-29 14:50回复
    I'm afraid im alone i've been failling
    aim for the star but i cant stop complaining
    In the haze, i got lost i've been waiting
    Forty in my cup that shit got me impatient.
    Ran away i just ran away from this place everyday with the same shit Driving me crazy
    Fake bitches they r all the same same faces, same fake shit they say
    why can't i see the light
    Why Can't I clear my mind
    There's no one by my side
    Why cant i be alright
    Suicide , i dont know other solution.
    Maybe i should fight but im lost in confusion. Do or die on the path that i've chosen. still alive but I feel like i'm frozen
    Locked up in the cage that I built 45
    Bullet to my neck if u want me killed.
    All night full of pain made me wanna pop a pill they don't love me, they love my thousand dollar bills
    I'm afraid im alone i've been failling
    aim for the star but i cant stop complaining
    In the haze, i got lost i've been waiting
    Forty in my cup that shit got me impatient.
    Ran away i just ran away from this place everyday with the same shit Driving me crazy
    Fake bitches they r all the same same faces, same fake shit they say
    And I dont want this anymore
    I just wanna make it big when im 24
    They'll know my name they'll know my face.
    They'll take back the shit that they said
    Get out my way , rapping the game,
    Fuckin your babe what you say
    Fuck a bitch and I dash eat my dick for my cash. Both hands on the glock pull the trigger if u flop. Hop out the coupe, and i shoot , bitch move gimme the loot
    Locked up in the cage that I built 45
    Bullet to my neck if u want me killed.
    All night full of pain made me wanna pop a pill they don't love me, they love my thousand dollar bills
    I'm afraid im alone i've been failling
    aim for the star but i cant stop complaining
    In the haze, i got lost i've been waiting
    Forty in my cup that shit got me impatient.
    Ran away i just ran away from this place everyday with the same shit Driving me crazy
    Fake bitches they r all the same same faces, same fake shit they say


    IP属地:泰国来自Android客户端2楼2019-10-29 14:50
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      2026-02-28 06:54:06
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      真好 我觉得旋律可以提升


      IP属地:重庆来自iPhone客户端3楼2019-10-29 17:59
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        好听啊,大佬


        IP属地:江苏来自Android客户端4楼2019-10-29 19:27
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          太好听了,网易云什么时候能听到!


          5楼2019-10-30 02:57
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            你网易云叫什么


            IP属地:广东6楼2019-10-30 09:13
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              帮顶


              来自iPhone客户端7楼2019-10-30 10:16
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                帮顶


                来自iPhone客户端8楼2019-10-30 10:16
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                  2026-02-28 06:48:06
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                  太好听了8!!!!


                  9楼2019-10-30 19:31
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                    我以为我是个人才 原来楼主也是个人才 未来肯定有他一席之地


                    来自iPhone客户端10楼2019-10-30 20:17
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                      准备不听直接骂 结果还可以 backup声音可以小点 (实在想不到了)


                      来自Android客户端11楼2019-10-30 20:21
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                        牛逼啊


                        IP属地:四川来自Android客户端12楼2019-10-30 23:19
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                          谢谢!!


                          IP属地:泰国来自Android客户端13楼2019-10-30 23:27
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                            来自iPhone客户端14楼2019-10-31 02:33
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                              2026-02-28 06:42:06
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                              C位出道


                              来自iPhone客户端17楼2019-10-31 22:15
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