有个帖子上有

I see my love;
I fly next to her;
I present her with my gift,
A small pice of solidified time
As soft to the touch as the mud in shallow sea.
Lonely markings are carved into time
As soft to the touch as the mud in shallow sea.
She covers her body with time,
And pulls me along to fly to the edge of existence.
This is a spiritual flight:
In our eyes, the stars appear as ghosts;
In the eyes of the stars, we appear as ghosts.

？？？不是《时间之墟》的？

如果是英国人读，他们不会认为这是诗。语言隔阂。另外，英语是表音的，他们对音自然更有要求。
我语文并不好，但中文版已经尽可能押尾韵：恋，边，间ian//软，缘an//纹，身en//灵，行ing。（其实按我们的习惯，这样也成不了诗，但至少顺口）
当然，翻译这事无法强求。

拉起我飞向存在的边缘——永生吗？

看看被删了几楼

啊

我就想知道 六脉神剑 北冥神功 怎么翻译？

歌者怎么说