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Nowadays,we can find numerous cars were fulled with the main road in a city during the period of long vacation or commute.In this situation,even a man’s walking would move faster than a car.This problem not only had bad effect on urban traffic and work efficient of corporations,but also deteriorate fragile conditions of environment.For this problem,some specialists and citizens proposed this view that some cities,especially several financial and political central cities,can cancel or reduce the limit of public transportation.For that,I partly agree with this opinion.
No doubt that is,this propose has some reasonable elements.Providing free public transportation can lessen the pressure of congestion that average cost of commute time would reduce in some extent.Furthermore,the pollution less than ever before would release to urban environment that will lead to strengthen citizen’s awareness of green city.
Therefore,root causes were not solved by this single measurement,people’s conscious of obeying traffic rules,increasingly private cars , imperfect pubic transportation system,disproportion between suburban district and city proper and so forth,all complicate factors gave rise to this phenomenon nowadays.So,if we have enough confidence to solve this problem,we must seek for various kinds of methods included of road programming,city construction,more completely traffic rules.In addition,promoting green travel was another effective way for decreasing urban traffic problems.
For we citizens,strengthening awareness of traffic rules was we can do to where we lived.After all,traffic congestion was a duty for every one ,every class in this zone.


  • juin12345
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1.我不是'专业的只是从我角度评判 极大可能不准 2没有题目咋给你评分呢 3如果一定要给一个分数我感觉只能5分


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客观分析,就说缺点吧,语法错误不少,很多中式英语,结构其实不够清晰,最高不会超过5.5。


  • 我不是我shine
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结构不好


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看到开头那么长就觉得上不了5.5


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打分不敢。只看了开头段,冗长还有不少语法错气,建议修改下


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只看了第一段。
你表述同一个意思有很多重复,导致看起来冗长,我一般喜欢三句话。而且你绕来绕去地说,更容易导致语法、用词错误。
观点上,我觉得你是不是写错了,应该不是limit public transportation而应该是私有车辆吧
按照你的原意改了下,但我觉得还可以简单点:影响可以模糊笼统些;观点表明最好更明确,partly是多少partly(这个看你自己主体怎么写 )
Nowadays, we can find city roads congested with vehicles during rush hours and vacation seasons when walk may even be faster than a car. Heavy traffic load not only diminishes life efficiency but also accelerates the aggravation of fragile environment. I partly agree with the opinion that private cars should be considerably reduced or even forbidden in cities especially in financial or political centers.


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