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这个作文是我自己找来写的，所以不着急改，大家有空再帮我看看吧。里面的连词不知道有没有用对地方，还有时态，词组搭配什么的

Last month, our company did a survey amony 1000 people who younger than 35 years old "If you carry shopping online ".The survey shows that 64% of those are willing to shop online because of it is convenience why them to buy what they need things at home.And that goods online not only are cheaper ,but also have a variety of hrands to choose.However ,the rest of those don*t want shopping online ,for they are worried to buy what false goods as well as being cheated out of money.In conclusion ,only by decrease disavantage of shop online will more and more people choose to shop online.