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嘤只能写成这样了,总觉得忘了说什么QAQ……
褒贬皆有一直是我评文的特点来着,不要介意哈(づ ̄3 ̄)づ╭❤~


IP属地:内蒙古261楼2015-02-01 23:45
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    鼬后退了两步,却被[url]http://鸣人[/url]用湿漉漉的手抓住了衣角,鸣人皱着眉撅起嘴说道:“喂,上次你还没回答我的话就跑了,这下被我抓到了吧。”说完露出个狡黠的笑,鼬有些诧异小狐狸的变脸速度,反射性回到“我叫鼬,不是妖怪,是来处理事情的上神。”小狐狸拖着调子念了下鼬的名字。鼬的名字之前只有[url]http://六道仙人[/url]可以叫,别人都只敢恭敬的称呼鼬为八咫殿下,听着小狐狸认真的语调,鼬完全没觉得不尊敬,一向注意仪表的鼬忘记了被弄湿的衣服,脸上带上笑意,鸣人看着鼬的笑,愣愣的放开了鼬的衣角,鼬也不知再说些什么,转身走了,走没几步,身后的小狐狸跟了上来,鼬没说什么,小狐狸就跟了一天。
    晚上,鼬终于忍不住转过头:“你为何跟着我。”小狐狸支吾了半天,没头没脑的问了鼬一句,你能不能再笑一下,鼬不说话,小狐狸脸上带了点着急和哀伤说你笑起来很像我一直等的大哥哥。鼬抿了下唇,心中对于被当成其他人有些不舒服,伸手揉了揉那头灿金的发,不知出于什么心理的说了句,再像我也不是你等的那人,有些人离开了就不会回来,说完才露出个笑。
    鼬以为那会是最后一次和[url]http://鸣人[/url]见面,没想到没过两日,又碰到了小狐狸。那时世间的皇帝迷信长生不老之术,派法师去民间寻求药引,九尾狐就是药引之一。小狐狸的运气说不上好还是不好,被法师发现了,在千钧一发之际,又被鼬救下了。命是救下了,小狐狸的神魂却受损严重,鼬觉得自己有点不太对,竟然没想让小狐狸损毁元神自行修复,而是想带他回神界医治,在小狐狸虚弱却强烈的要求下,走之前去和蛇精道了个别。
    后来小狐狸神魂修复好了,鼬也不提让他回去的事情,时间久了,小狐狸也不问,时间再久一点,鼬理所当然的和[url]http://鸣人[/url]在一起了。等到鸣人修行千年,便要历劫了,九尾狐的天劫是九世轮回,轮回中历尽九大劫数,一劫不过就会灰飞烟灭。鼬本可以为鸣人逆天改命,挣扎着最终还是遵循秩序,让爱人去历劫。鼬还是放心不下的,在鸣人第一世,鼬把自己一缕神魂抽离化为八咫鸦,在鸣人之前送入了轮回路,就是后来的宇智波鼬,岂料宇智波鼬因为和鼬相似的性格,做出和鼬相似的选择,结果先鸣人而去了。
    这一桩桩一件件,还有[url]http://六道仙人[/url]的话,都在重重的敲打着鼬的心,一直以来,[url]http://鸣人[/url]在自己的身边,鼬都当做是理所当然的事情,相爱总会让人以为有恃无恐,鼬一直让自己相信鸣人的离开只是时间的问题,鸣人的归宿只在自己这里。现在想想,其实鸣人身边出现的人,早就让鼬有了危机感,只是不敢承认罢了。鼬忽然想通了,原来自己只是个胆小鬼而已,从来不敢正视,鸣人会离开的可能性,所以只能被动的等待,以秩序为借口束缚着自己。鼬自嘲的笑了笑,闭了下眼睛,睁开时,眼神是带着坚定的温柔——鸣人,等我。
    清晨,[url]http://鸣人[/url]迷迷糊糊的张开眼睛,在看到鼬含笑躺在身边注视自己的时候,一下子清醒了,慌乱的摸着鼬的脸,脖颈,胳膊,然后抱紧了鼬:“鼬,鼬你还在,你还在,真好,鼬我做了一个好长好长的梦,我梦见我轮回转世了,我梦见你。。。”鼬安抚的拍着鸣人的背,柔声打断鸣人:“嘘,那只是个梦,现在梦醒了,我当然在你身边,我会一直在你身边,我怎么舍得离开你,我爱你啊鸣人。”今后,都不会离开,这世间超越一切的我的挚爱。
    神界鼬和[url]http://鸣人[/url]住处的不远,两个仙子正在谈论着什么。
    “你有没有看见新上任的花神!”
    “没有啊,怎么了。”
    “哎呀,今早花神上任的时候,我看到了,长得可真英俊呐,有那么点像八咫殿下。”
    “真的吗,比之前上任的兽神还要好看吗?”
    “兽神殿下英俊是英俊,可是那性格还真是懒的可以。”
    “那也没办法,谁让兽神殿下是蛇修炼来的呢。”
    “说到原身,新的花神殿是什么你一定猜不到。”
    “那有什么好猜的,历来都是那几大名花。”
    “那你可错了,历代兽神还没有蛇修呢,我跟你说啊,花神大人可是曼珠沙华。”
    “怎么可能!那种阴森森的花怎么可能修炼成神。”
    “我还能骗你不成,成神的哪个不是有点机缘,就说刚成神的[url]http://鸣人[/url]殿下之前可是。。。”
    这世间因果既算不清,难说结束许是另一段开始。
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    IP属地:新疆263楼2015-02-23 01:15
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      来自Android客户端264楼2015-04-09 18:02
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        IP属地:湖南来自iPhone客户端265楼2015-04-17 09:48
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          当年听到琴师这首歌也是非常想写个故事,现在看完楼主的,觉得我也不用写了……
          情节很跌宕,逻辑很合理,该有的描写都有,该上肉的时候也上的恰当。楼主你几乎有我所有缺乏的特质简直不能更崇拜……


          IP属地:北京来自iPhone客户端267楼2015-05-03 00:21
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            好文,赞一个!


            IP属地:福建268楼2015-05-25 23:34
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              卧槽!!!好看诶


              来自Android客户端269楼2015-05-29 17:41
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                来自Android客户端270楼2015-07-05 15:09
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                  楼主写的很棒,特别是几个番外,让我看了有种莫名的感动在心头。佐助的角色是本文中刻画的最好的,可以说他是执棋者,也可以说他是棋子,个人觉得他对鸣人的爱最深刻。对了,楼楼文笔不错,思路也很清晰,文很有代入感啊!!!


                  来自Android客户端271楼2015-07-05 15:17
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                    好久没有看过这么带感的文了


                    来自Android客户端274楼2015-07-21 10:19
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                      感动 难过 心疼 好纠结的赶脚…


                      来自iPhone客户端275楼2015-08-19 04:32
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                        赞一个


                        来自iPhone客户端276楼2015-08-19 04:32
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                          重新看了一遍,果然虐的我飙眼泪


                          IP属地:河南来自iPhone客户端277楼2015-10-14 03:00
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