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PART 1: MELS的一篇作文
我在节日期间做了些什么
MELS ZUCKER
在暑假的时候我遇见了DOCTOR（老师在这里打了一把叉“又来了！”）然后和他一起进入了他的蓝色警亭里。我们在1912年乘坐了泰坦尼克号，而且我们还阻止了它的沉没，因为我们用一道激光把冰山融化掉了。
（老师在这一段开头打上了“？！”）然后我们去见了国王HENRY，阻止了他杀害他的妻子们（妻子们错拼成了“WIFES”），而且我们还让他给他的每一个妻子都赠送了一座城堡，这样她们就可以和她们的（错拼成“THEYRE”）父母住在一起了。英格兰的每一个人都很高兴，于是举办了一场聚会，DOCTOR做了一场演讲，每个人都在拍手，笑声不断，然后DOCTOR说“谢谢你，MELS，这是个很棒的主意。下一站去哪里？”
于是接着我们去了1066年，从维京人手中偷走了他们的箭，救了英格兰。国王HAROLD从来没有那么高兴过，他还给我们做了蛋糕，而且没有弄糊。
然后我们去见了CLEOPATRA，我一直都很喜欢她，我们在她的一座金字塔里喝了茶，然后告诉她她的男朋友很垃圾，她应该把他甩掉，而她同意了，但是后来她就想亲DOCTOR一口了！
接下来就是周末了，我们就停了下来。
在接下来的一周里，我们去了1963年见KENNEDY总统，冲他大喊“蹲下！”，他很高兴，问我有没有什么想做的事情，于是我问他能不能让纽约的大街小巷都干净一点，少一些老鼠，他保证说他一定会做到，这很好。
“这真是一个很忙的星期啊，MELS！”DOCTOR说，“接下来干什么？”于是我问他为什么他从来都不向纳粹开枪射击，他说他从来没想过这个问题，于是我告诉他这样不对，于是我们就去对着纳粹开枪，还有HITLER也被我们打中了。“射击很有意思，MELS！”DOCTOR说，“我们去俄罗斯再来一次吧！”
于是我们就去了。
（老师旁批：我不是要你写什么科幻作文，MELS！）
“这个假期真愉快啊，MELS！”DOCTOR说。“我们现在又做什么？”
“我们能不能结婚呢，DOCTOR？”我问他。
他说好，虽然我看起来比他小很多。
作为结婚礼物他带我去看了我的父母。
这就是我假期所做的事情而且这是真的而且我没有偷那辆卡车。
（老师评语：来找我！）
我在节日期间做了些什么
MELS ZUCKER
在暑假的时候我遇见了DOCTOR（老师在这里打了一把叉“又来了！”）然后和他一起进入了他的蓝色警亭里。我们在1912年乘坐了泰坦尼克号，而且我们还阻止了它的沉没，因为我们用一道激光把冰山融化掉了。
（老师在这一段开头打上了“？！”）然后我们去见了国王HENRY，阻止了他杀害他的妻子们（妻子们错拼成了“WIFES”），而且我们还让他给他的每一个妻子都赠送了一座城堡，这样她们就可以和她们的（错拼成“THEYRE”）父母住在一起了。英格兰的每一个人都很高兴，于是举办了一场聚会，DOCTOR做了一场演讲，每个人都在拍手，笑声不断，然后DOCTOR说“谢谢你，MELS，这是个很棒的主意。下一站去哪里？”
于是接着我们去了1066年，从维京人手中偷走了他们的箭，救了英格兰。国王HAROLD从来没有那么高兴过，他还给我们做了蛋糕，而且没有弄糊。
然后我们去见了CLEOPATRA，我一直都很喜欢她，我们在她的一座金字塔里喝了茶，然后告诉她她的男朋友很垃圾，她应该把他甩掉，而她同意了，但是后来她就想亲DOCTOR一口了！
接下来就是周末了，我们就停了下来。
在接下来的一周里，我们去了1963年见KENNEDY总统，冲他大喊“蹲下！”，他很高兴，问我有没有什么想做的事情，于是我问他能不能让纽约的大街小巷都干净一点，少一些老鼠，他保证说他一定会做到，这很好。
“这真是一个很忙的星期啊，MELS！”DOCTOR说，“接下来干什么？”于是我问他为什么他从来都不向纳粹开枪射击，他说他从来没想过这个问题，于是我告诉他这样不对，于是我们就去对着纳粹开枪，还有HITLER也被我们打中了。“射击很有意思，MELS！”DOCTOR说，“我们去俄罗斯再来一次吧！”
于是我们就去了。
（老师旁批：我不是要你写什么科幻作文，MELS！）
“这个假期真愉快啊，MELS！”DOCTOR说。“我们现在又做什么？”
“我们能不能结婚呢，DOCTOR？”我问他。
他说好，虽然我看起来比他小很多。
作为结婚礼物他带我去看了我的父母。
这就是我假期所做的事情而且这是真的而且我没有偷那辆卡车。
（老师评语：来找我！）
楼主加油！问一下哈，这是真有小朋友那样写的吗？不感兴趣
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所以就不要逐字逐句对比了吧。。。 Rory Williams
ENGLISH: Rory was a very good attention span and will really stick at a topic until it is finished. Unless, that is, he is distracted by one of his many girl friends.
MATHS: Rory has mad some progress this term, although he's better an his own than in group work with his friends, as they tend to dominate him.
HISTORY: Rory did an excellent project on the Romans. Commended.
GEOGRAPHY: I'm afraid I'm not going to be the only one to have to draw attention to Rory's LACK OF APPLICATION to a subject. Often I heve caught him in the act of passing notes between two other pupils. He is a BRIGHT boy but easily led.
DRAMA: Rory is very good at standing still and could do a very nice tree or a butterfly.
ENGLISH: Rory was a very good attention span and will really stick at a topic until it is finished. Unless, that is, he is distracted by one of his many girl friends.
MATHS: Rory has mad some progress this term, although he's better an his own than in group work with his friends, as they tend to dominate him.
HISTORY: Rory did an excellent project on the Romans. Commended.
GEOGRAPHY: I'm afraid I'm not going to be the only one to have to draw attention to Rory's LACK OF APPLICATION to a subject. Often I heve caught him in the act of passing notes between two other pupils. He is a BRIGHT boy but easily led.
DRAMA: Rory is very good at standing still and could do a very nice tree or a butterfly.
Mels Zucker
ENGLISH: Often a joy to listen to - however, she sometimes seems unable to come up with a story with a happy ending, and is always writing about guns.
MATHS: Mels is very good at counting backwards.
HISTORY: Several times, regrettably, Mels has had to be sent to the Headmaster. She will insist on rewriting history, having it end her way. She is unable to tell the difference between solid fact and a story.
GEOGRAPHY: Miss Zucher is an EXTREMELY DISRUPTIVE influence in class, and is occasionlly very UPSETTING to other children. I sometimes question why she is here at all.
DRAMA: Mels is a wonderful, imaginative spirit and is excellent in drama, especially at pretending to be someone else.
ENGLISH: Often a joy to listen to - however, she sometimes seems unable to come up with a story with a happy ending, and is always writing about guns.
MATHS: Mels is very good at counting backwards.
HISTORY: Several times, regrettably, Mels has had to be sent to the Headmaster. She will insist on rewriting history, having it end her way. She is unable to tell the difference between solid fact and a story.
GEOGRAPHY: Miss Zucher is an EXTREMELY DISRUPTIVE influence in class, and is occasionlly very UPSETTING to other children. I sometimes question why she is here at all.
DRAMA: Mels is a wonderful, imaginative spirit and is excellent in drama, especially at pretending to be someone else.
Amelia Pond
ENGLISH: Amy still insists on writing stories about the Doctor. I had hoped we'd heard the last of him.
MATHS: Sadly, Amy is more interested in leading some of my other pupils astray than knucking down to the curriculum.
HISTORY: Amy really doesn't apply herself to history, sadly. Her one bright spot was a project about the Roman Invasion of Britain.
GEOGRAPHY: Amy shows a real aptitude and likes learning about Europe. She did a really COMMENDABLE project about Belgium and absolutely will one day make a great traveller.
DRAMA: Amy's playacting has caused me continued concern. Her imaginary friend cannot be kept out of class and I am reluctantly forced to recommend counselling.
ENGLISH: Amy still insists on writing stories about the Doctor. I had hoped we'd heard the last of him.
MATHS: Sadly, Amy is more interested in leading some of my other pupils astray than knucking down to the curriculum.
HISTORY: Amy really doesn't apply herself to history, sadly. Her one bright spot was a project about the Roman Invasion of Britain.
GEOGRAPHY: Amy shows a real aptitude and likes learning about Europe. She did a really COMMENDABLE project about Belgium and absolutely will one day make a great traveller.
DRAMA: Amy's playacting has caused me continued concern. Her imaginary friend cannot be kept out of class and I am reluctantly forced to recommend counselling.
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