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【原创】Precious berry

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As I wandered into an untamed copse, where sunlight dappled the ground in broken gold, my eyes rested on something quite arresting: a wild bramble, bulging with clumps of berries black as night with no moon.
They dangled there, droplets of some deep shadow,an oiled orb of perfect black. A slight silvery bloom, the kiss of morning dew, lay upon their skin and they were nothing less than fruit, no longer creatures but gems wrought by Nature's most cunning hand.


IP属地:英国来自iPhone客户端1楼2025-10-06 02:43回复
    “My eyes rested on something quite arresting” sounds redundant, u could probably achieve more with less.


    IP属地:加拿大来自iPhone客户端2楼2025-10-06 06:45
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      2026-02-06 20:38:13
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      agree. rest and arrest sound a bit awkward


      IP属地:美国来自iPhone客户端3楼2025-10-18 04:21
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        但是你写的已经级好了,小词用的很精准


        IP属地:美国来自iPhone客户端4楼2025-10-18 04:22
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